Tuesday, February 21, 2012

Platform Building Challenge

Time for the first challenge of the Fourth Platform Builders Campaign Challenge.

This is such a fabulous way to but you in a box and then make you tear off the sides with your own flare. It's a challenge, and I must say, lately my writing takes a strange path when writing short pieces.

These are the guidelines: 
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count. 
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
  • end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
  • include the word "orange" in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly
and.... our picture to use for inspiration should we so choose. My entry......
Awakened

They told us it would happen but I never believed. I was the skeptic. I said it could be held. I said those men of power would not give in and believe the lies. I believed we as humans were stronger. I was wrong.

Shadows crept across the wall, and we knew the day would soon be lost. Darkness was coming. Endless darkness. This was it. The battle would begin. The unleashing of evil across the world. We stood ready. Our faith, our shield in this troubled time. I laughed thinking about what God called His armor. He was right about what we needed. I never thought I'd see people turn on each other so quickly. Evil in the air was drifting into hearts.

“It's happening! Come outside!” My brother yelled. We ran down to the beach. The last orange sky we would ever see. He turned to me, shaking, and held out Dad's sword. It had hung on the wall above the shadow box where mom had displayed his Dress Blues. He knew I loved it, and today, sliding it from its sheath, recently sharpened, I knew he would be proud.

“Ooh-rah.” I whispered, and everything faded.


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You're welcome to "like" mine for a vote. I'm #81 on the list. 



18 comments:

  1. Ooh very interesting!! Cool take on the challenge!! "I believed we as humans were stronger. I was wrong." That line was awesome. Great job!

    I'm entry #19

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  2. I LOVE this! What a great use of the prompt. Ooh-rah!

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  3. Exciting and a fresh perspective - very well executed!

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  4. An ominous piece, in a good way. Nice one! :)

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  5. Very interesting! I really like this one! :)

    I'm #37

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  6. Disturbing as I am sure you intended. Well done.

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  7. Very cool! And yes, very original spin to the challenge. Nicely done. Semper fi!

    I'm a new follower and challenge entry #96.

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  8. Congratulations! Your piece has been shortlisted to advance to the quarter final round. Good luck!

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  9. Great set up for what evil is to come. Congrats on the shortlist.

    I'm #58, Tale Spinning

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  10. Interesting! Do you write dystopian?

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  11. What a dark piece get it? Dark? Okay sorry, I've read too many of these now. Nicely done. Mine is #71

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  12. Very dramatic and apocalyptic. I'd like to know more about the characters.

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  13. I love the brother-sister angle. And that they are fighting together is awesome. Great entry. I'm #151.
    A2ZMommy and What’s In Between

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  14. Nice piece showing brother and sister joining together to battle ????

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